In The Street Of The Night Sky

after reading e.e.cummings, for an Imaginary Garden With Real Toads poetry prompt: http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/

 

Five in the morning,

with night fading out,

as the Spring sun pushes across the sky,

poking stars and planets alike

with insistent finger-rays.

The magpie’s eye opens,

retaining a hint of dream,

and she warbles in the day.

If Helios drives His chariot

rudely across the body of Nuit,

(for They are all one great pantheon in my mind)

then surely, He is drawn by birds,

not stallions.

 

6 thoughts on “In The Street Of The Night Sky

  1. wow – this is wonderful! and completely refreshing! I really like how you’ve taken this prompt and worked it in a very different fashion, spinning it in your voice. I really love the opening lines, they are seductive in a fashion, a gentle teasing, and then, the words lend themselves to a slight playfulness, it’s gorgeous. And then … the bird –
    The magpie’s eye opens,
    retaining a hint of dream,
    and she warbles in the day.

    This is so atmospheric. It paints such an amazing image. I love it.
    And then the poem’s ending, is just great. This is truly a pleasure to read. I’m so loving it. And a most apt conclusion to draw; yes indeed.

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  2. “retaining a hint of dream”, what a fantastic line. I can see that hint dancing its way into being… And tone of the lines about Helios and Nuit is perfect. I can almost see the speaker raising, even shaking a finger.

    Like

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